pulse: song 1 locked

wip/pulse.md

@@ -67,42 +67,22 @@ Subdued sonic scalars vectorise
 Acoustic aberrations dissipate
 
 // --- stanza: the receiving end ---
-Isotropic funnel struck by a packet rain
+Isotropic funnel strikes a packet rain
 Fine-grained bags of acks ground astray
 
 Ocean as a desert buries all of its life
 Deck the shell with a perfect thermocline
 // 'deck the shell': intentional vagueness between 'decorate the outer shell' and 'knock on the border surface'.  
 
-Gone is the spark in your rover's eyes
-Or there is no space for another one otherwise
-// The image is good, the language isn't: too plain here. 
-// Stay optical
-// *New line 1*:
-// Curtain shut before the Fresnel bights
-// *potential new line 2*:
-// Plasmatic injection in your rover's eyes
+Curtain shut before the Fresnel bights
+Plasma buildup swells your rover's thighs
 
 // ending verse(s) before the painfully long instrumental outro
-particular pressure over a landlocked island
+particular pressure plagues across a landlocked island
+// placeholder U-L-A lines, change at will
 unravelled is the illusionary ziptie independency
 lamenting functions weave a zigzag pattern
 stabilising fins break the rogue waves
+// Locked final reverse acrostic
 essential sentiments left unconditionally permanent
 ```
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-## Resume note — 2026-05-12 (reworking the L77-78 couplet)
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-Old L77-78 ("Gone is the spark...") being replaced — too plain. **Line 1 locked:** *"Curtain shut before the Fresnel bights"* (Fresnel = the lighthouse lens; "curtain shut" = the old eclipse mechanism, a screen drawn across a steady lamp; "bights" = the bay / the lens's curved ridges / homophone of "bites"). The image is the **off-state of a pulsed transmitter, said without the word "off"**.
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-**Couplet anchor:** pulsed transmission up close — one signalet must terminate before the next can send; the dark/off is the mandatory inter-pulse gap, *not* a sad ending. Keep a "rover" somewhere in the couplet. "Spark" is binned (drags toward elegy; "catchlight" clattered phonetically).
-
-**Line 2 — still open.** Candidates:
-- *"Plasmatic injection in your rover's eyes"* (parked at L84): recovers the electro-optical "spark" register via plasma; reads as the *recharge* phase after the curtain shuts. Caveats — loose rhyme vs "bights"; must read sequential to L1, not "blazing now".
-- *"The rover counts the dark that falls between the lights"*: full plural rhyme; the dark = the part you read (a lighthouse is ID'd by timing its eclipses).
-- *"No next flash from the rover till this one's out of sight"*: states the sequencing rule plainly; slant rhyme vs the now-plural "bights".
-- *"No two flames on the same coastline ignite"*: aphoristic; drops the rover anchor.
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-**Register target for L2:** not poetic, not plain — *flavoured* / tilted vernacular, the inch between. Don't shoehorn football punditry; the author works that lever himself when an opening shows.
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-Also: L87 changed "partial coldfront" → "particular pressure over a landlocked island" (still P for the acrostic). Acrostic outro L87-91 otherwise considered OK; **L91 is a must-keep** — reverse acrostic, word-initials E-S-L-U-P = PULSE backwards, the thematic landing. Optional second PULSE 5-liner: not yet drafted.