diff --git a/wip/pulse.md b/wip/pulse.md index ddcbe7a..0da56c6 100644 --- a/wip/pulse.md +++ b/wip/pulse.md @@ -80,6 +80,8 @@ Or there is no space for another one otherwise // Stay optical // *New line 1*: // Curtain shut before the Fresnel bights +// *potential new line 2*: +// Plasmatic injection in your rover's eyes // ending verse(s) before the painfully long instrumental outro particular pressure over a landlocked island @@ -87,4 +89,20 @@ unravelled is the illusionary ziptie independency lamenting functions weave a zigzag pattern stabilising fins break the rogue waves essential sentiments left unconditionally permanent -``` \ No newline at end of file +``` + +## Resume note — 2026-05-12 (reworking the L77-78 couplet) + +Old L77-78 ("Gone is the spark...") being replaced — too plain. **Line 1 locked:** *"Curtain shut before the Fresnel bights"* (Fresnel = the lighthouse lens; "curtain shut" = the old eclipse mechanism, a screen drawn across a steady lamp; "bights" = the bay / the lens's curved ridges / homophone of "bites"). The image is the **off-state of a pulsed transmitter, said without the word "off"**. + +**Couplet anchor:** pulsed transmission up close — one signalet must terminate before the next can send; the dark/off is the mandatory inter-pulse gap, *not* a sad ending. Keep a "rover" somewhere in the couplet. "Spark" is binned (drags toward elegy; "catchlight" clattered phonetically). + +**Line 2 — still open.** Candidates: +- *"Plasmatic injection in your rover's eyes"* (parked at L84): recovers the electro-optical "spark" register via plasma; reads as the *recharge* phase after the curtain shuts. Caveats — loose rhyme vs "bights"; must read sequential to L1, not "blazing now". +- *"The rover counts the dark that falls between the lights"*: full plural rhyme; the dark = the part you read (a lighthouse is ID'd by timing its eclipses). +- *"No next flash from the rover till this one's out of sight"*: states the sequencing rule plainly; slant rhyme vs the now-plural "bights". +- *"No two flames on the same coastline ignite"*: aphoristic; drops the rover anchor. + +**Register target for L2:** not poetic, not plain — *flavoured* / tilted vernacular, the inch between. Don't shoehorn football punditry; the author works that lever himself when an opening shows. + +Also: L87 changed "partial coldfront" → "particular pressure over a landlocked island" (still P for the acrostic). Acrostic outro L87-91 otherwise considered OK; **L91 is a must-keep** — reverse acrostic, word-initials E-S-L-U-P = PULSE backwards, the thematic landing. Optional second PULSE 5-liner: not yet drafted. \ No newline at end of file